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Zeigt mir den Edelstein aus der Kammer der Sünden. Er erinnert mich an einen Tugend-Edelstein, ähnlich denen, die Ihr bereits Euer Eigen nennt. Dennoch passt er ganz eindeutig nicht in Eure Standardausrüstung. Schaut Euch nur die Farbe an. Spürt die Energie, die aus ihm herausströmt. Maligaro hatte sicher vieles im Sinn, als er dieses Kleinod herstellte, doch ganz bestimmt keine Tugenden.

Diese Banditen, auf die Ihr da draußen gestoßen seid ... sie sind der Abschaum von Oriath. Und wie bei jeder Brühe treiben die widerlichsten Stückchen an die Oberfläche. Die Diebesfürsten ... Eik, Kraityn und Alira ... die selbst ernannten Monarchen des Waldes. Kraityn im Osten. Alira im Westen. Eik im Norden. Und dieses Dorf, dieser Stamm ... zahlt ihnen Steuern. Ich würde niemals behaupten, das Leben in Wraeclast sei einfach, aber ohne diese drei ... nun ja, wäre ein Leben hier durchaus möglich.

Der Geist ist stark in Grimmschrein. Wenn Ihr die Steine berührt, werdet Ihr es spüren. Sie haben zu mir gesprochen und mir befohlen, ihren Altar zu holen und die Hand eines guten Menschen zu finden. Er lebte in dieser „Kirche“, wie Ihr das zu nennen pflegt. Der Altar gehört ihm und erwacht zum Leben, wenn er ihn ein weiteres Mal berührt. Könnt Ihr den guten Mann finden und mir seine Hand bringen? Wenn der Geist des Altars zum Leben erwacht, werde ich seine Macht mit Euch teilen. Das verspreche ich.

Davon habe ich geträumt. Eine riesige Kreatur, ein Wesen aus dem Schattenreich. Ich habe sie aus einem schwarzen Gefängnis fliehen und einen von Menschenhand erschaffenen Berg hochtreiben sehen wie der Nebel, der nach den Wolken greift. Sie verweilte an der Spitze des Berges und aß das Herz der Sonne. Ihr riecht nach diesem schwarzen Nebel und nach ... etwas anderem. Nach Schuld. Ja, das ist es. Schuld ist eine schwere Krankheit. Sie nagt am Geist, bis nichts mehr davon übrig ist und man zu einer dieser herumwandelnden Leichen geworden ist. Wollt Ihr geheilt werden? Sucht den von Menschenhand erschaffenen Berg, schickt den Schatten nach Hause und sagt dem Monster, es soll Eure Schuld gleich mitnehmen.

Translated back : His arrogance got the life for my father
Usually, it would be worded as : Son arrogance lui à couté la vie.
The reference to her father is quite implicit.


We lose the fact that he was in a hideaway... Also, after it has become a wreckage, using "sous" (under) seems more appropriate than "dans" (in). I propose "il était calfeutré dans un recoin de l'épave" maybe not the best, but it is correct.


Larceny has not been translated ? "Les seigneurs brigands" seems correct, maybe you could do better.

EDIT : was intended... ignore this WARNING we have a huuuuuge litle problem here... Kraytin if pronounced like "crétin" (phoneme : /kʁɛtɛ̃/ ) means "moron", and Kraytin, if you read it as if it were a french word, should have the same phoneme. So... I don't know what you can do.



"Chapelle" sounds more cool than "Église" and less catholic.
"il peut le réveillé" who is "le" ? even in the english, I'm having a hard time figuring it out. "Il" would first bring back in mind something that can act, so we think that "il" refere to the good man, but then, what would he wake ? the altar ? can an altar awake ? if not, it seems it is the altar that wake the man... Looking back at the original, it's «it» so it should be the altar that wake up... strange.
"en le touchant" again... well, we can understand that it is the altar, but too much "le" and "il" in one hard sentence.


Iron-arse is literally "Cul d'Acier" don't know what is the english meaning, it's usage, but in French, sounds out of context.


I have also seen that in the first preview, Lioneye was not translated in french, but was in the others. And well, now you have one translated name and two non-translated in the others versions while in French we have the 3 original names :P
Lioneye will translate as Œuil-de-Lion. I do not want to make a decision about wheter those name should be translated or not.
But : when trading, people will use shorthand like hubris, crown of eyes, coe, gcp, 2h maces, wp. Even some will pop in global chat : «wp to mud flats / ledge plz». This will hurt a lot. You can't translate nothing nor can you translate anything without having some problem.
Well, I should not be the first to say this, and all this talk was for nothing... but I prefere to insist on it. Whatever you choose, the translation is very good so far, so go !

EDIT : after discussing it with some colleague, your translation is perfectly good. Ignore. Other point : "De mémoire de Karui, on n'avait jamais vu" is like saying "As far as I know, I had never seen such the like". Talking about past in the past... I think english is the same, you would have said "Afaik, I have never seen" because your not dead yet, are you ? "De mémoire de Karui, on n'a jamais vu" seems more correct.

- Replace "danação" with "condenação", which is a much more accurate translation;

- Add "Eu" to the sentence "Ainda estou pagando pela minha" (Eu ainda estou pagando pela minha). If you take out the pronoun, the sentence doesn't make that much sense.

- Replace "daquele lado" with "lá fora". "Daquele lado" translates to "on that side" and that's not what Nessa means;

- Replace "carniceiros" (which translates as butchers) with "mercenários". Although there is no word in Portuguese for scavengers, "mercenários" makes much more sense than "carniceiros";

- Replace "vivo" (alive) with "sobrevivente" (survivor);

- Replace "Sei lá" with "Não sei". "Sei lá" is way too informal and doesn't really suit Nessa's speech;

- Replace "fato" with "trauma", which depicts more clearly the fact that Bestel went through a traumatic experience.

Like I said in the previous version of this thread, that translation is not... poetic at all. I'll rewrite here the poem I wrote back then, which actually rhymes and keeps its original meaning.

"O Tarkleigh resgatou das ondas,
Um Bestel ferido, à mercê do destino.
Sua tripulação está desfeita, bem como seu embarque,
Mas o Bestel continua vivo, graças ao Tark… leigh."

- Replace "da primeira vez que botei meus olhos espertos em você" with "desde a primeira vez que vi seus acutilantes olhos". The first sentence makes it sound as if it's Bestel who has "sharp peepers", when he's actually referring to the player's eyes;

- "E por isso agradeço em nome de todos os irmãos piratas das ondas mortos". This is WRONG. It translates as "Thus I thank you on behalf of all the fallen pirates of the waves", and that's NOT what Bestel means at all! The guy hates pirates for what they did to him and his crew, so he's thanking on behalf of everyone EXCEPT pirates. A proper translation would be "Fora os piratas, eu lhe agradeço em nome de todos os irmãos do mar perecidos".

- "... tipo aquela que você já tem..." should be "...tipo aquelas que você já tem...", because the first implies that the player is carrying a single gem and not multiple;

- Replace "mas obviamente não vai encaixar em nenhum equipamento normal" with "mas obviamente não foi feita para ser inserida em um equipamente normal", the first one is correct grammatically but doesn't really depict what Eramir is saying;

- "... virtude em mente quando ele fez essa coisa". Remove "ele", since the pronoun is not necessary and only makes the sentence sound weird.

- Replace "por lá" with "lá fora", because if you use the first one the sentence sounds incomplete;

- Replace "pária" with "escória", which better conveys the sense of "scum" that Eramir is trying to transmit;

- "E como em todo o caldo ruim, os piores pedaços emergem à superfície";

- "Eu não arriscaria dizer que a vida em Wraeclast seria fácil..." is the correct tense.

- I don't really like the idea of translating names of places, so I would keep Fellshrine as Fellshrine and don't translate it;

- "... e acordará quando ele o tocar mais uma vez". "Tocar-lhe" is grammatically wrong in that sentence.

- Replace "vasta" with "imensa", so as to convey the sense of great size better;

- "Eu a vi escapar de uma prisão negra e escalar uma montanha feita pelo Homem, se esgueirando pelas suas quatro enormes paredes acima como a névoa que sobe para as nuvens" is a much more clean translation. The original one is really confusing;

- Replace "Tudo se reuniu" with "A névoa se reuniu", indicating that it was the mist that gathered, not something else;

- Replace "é uma grande doença" with "é uma doença letal", conveying the sense of deadliness.

- Once again, I don't like translating names of people / places, so I would keep Lioneye as it is;

- Replace "Dividi-los direitinho" with "Dividir o mal pelas aldeias, você conhece o ditado". This is actually a Portuguese saying of the same meaning as the one in English.

- "Fomos ao esgoto e não saímos de lá até sentir o cheiro" this sentence makes no sense. "Fomos pelos esgotos e não saímos até sentir o cheiro do mar" is a much better translation.

- "Kaom levou a cabeça do Senhor Olho de Leão e toda a costa sul até a Gruta da Sereia". Took is mistakenly translated as "levou" which means "carried" and makes the sentence have no sense. Should be something like "Kaom cortou a cabeça do Lioneye e conquistou toda a costa sul até Siren's Cove";

- "Foi a maior conquista que os Karui já viram".