ZiggyD's Community Unique Design - Names and Flavour Text


"The famed combatant Fammal, the previous sword king

Though he was Daresso's better, he fell to his swing

For even his surest blows couldn't find their mark

And those that did felt little more than twigs against a bark"


I think it should be "And those that did felt like twigs against a bark" since in your context it seems as if the hits are stronger than what they are
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Stormalonger wrote:

"The famed combatant Fammal, the previous sword king

Though he was Daresso's better, he fell to his swing

For even his surest blows couldn't find their mark

And those that did felt little more than twigs against a bark"


I think it should be "And those that did felt like twigs against a bark" since in your context it seems as if the hits are stronger than what they are


Yes my original idea was "like".

But i thought why not extend it a little.(Which might or might not be good)

That's why i left it in the note, the "like" was in the original edit.

Edit:- Ok now that i re-read it, i realize that the "little more than" should be in the note and "like" is actually far better.
Devoto's Assault Vanguard Belt

"Devoto knew to beat his opponents at war
he had to be as mercurial as war itself."
Hippolyte's Belt

The Girdle was a gift from Mars, God of War, to Hippolyte, the Queen and greatest warrior of the Amazons.
Last edited by Vrori#5594 on Jul 19, 2016, 4:15:49 AM
"There is no offense like a great defense". Gladiator ZiggyD upon slaying Atziri.
Tears of Time
Vanguard Belt



"No one knows the pain you feel
No one knows the screams you steal"

The Pillar of Strength.

True strength comes from the powerful core.

P.S.: Do you even lift?
Last edited by T_Reich#5651 on Jul 19, 2016, 4:19:49 AM
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T_Reich wrote:
The Pillar of Strength.

True strength comes from the powerful core.

P.S.: Do you even lift?


Doth thy even lift, Brethren?? :D
Steadyfast
Vanguard Belt

Toughness is an offense. Swiftness is a defense.
The opposite is also true.



Spoiler
Yes, the 'y' is intentional.
Last edited by This#5451 on Jul 19, 2016, 4:26:35 AM
Hate that fortify and onslaught won, I have no interest in this belt anymore.

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