The Black Spirit (Witch Origin Story)
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[Removed by Support] Here's the Witch.
Previous Stories: Templar - [Removed by Support] Scion - [Removed by Support] ---------------- The Black Spirit ---------------- Very old, wrinkled woman slowly sat down on the bed. Well, black spirit's revelation that was accumulated for so long, has finally materialized. For thirty years, at night she hear dark voice promising her unlimited power, immortality, and reflection of her blaze of glory through the ages, as in a mirror. The old woman did not know what thing 'a mirror', although, as said by the people, some exists at the Residence of the High Templar of Oriath, Dominus. And, as black spirit explained to her, it is only sacrifice that necessary for this purpose. Kill someone and very blood of him opens the door to a great future. Where there is a blood door, there is a blood key, old thaumaturgical wise. And she did not need to go to deal with her conscience, to make it happen: the wrinkled woman did not like anyone in the village. They are whispering behind her, throwing stones in her, hide from her children. Not so long ago they burned down her house, and her sisters, and it took her to move into the dungeon. So promises of mysterious voices she was accepted almost immediately. She took her sculpted four pieces masterminded by voice and went through the village. The village seemed extinct. No word, no inhalation or exhalation. The crone slowly went to the first house. She found a bed with chile. Then, whispering a spell that prompted by helpfully black voice, she took Sacrifice at Dusk and stabbed it in the neck of the child. He slowly suffocated and died, and at the place of impact strucked a powerful area of necrosis. Witch looked with satisfaction at magic created by black spirit, and went on. And soon caught up with her second child death from even more acute and dangerous Sacrifice at Midnight. Soon came the turn of the other two children. "I like you better this way", murmured a crone. When it was done, the old woman returned to her dungeon house and began to sort things, it was like something os missing. Soon she is fell asleep. The nightmares around her and within black spirit promised her immortality. And black spirit was echoed by another, quiet voice, he promises her fate of the Empress of the Eternal Empire. It is only need to pass through trials... Soon Blackguard of Dominus appeared. Of course, local residents reported a case of mass death of children and realized who their murderer. Woman tied up, shackled and taken to divine court for Dominus. It was many rumours about Dominus, The High Templar. He was a tall man in ceremonial robes, without pants, at the head of him was the traditional blue mask, a symbol of the deep connection with the Divine. On his right sat the famous witch hunter, general Graviticus, Commander of the Ebony Legion. On the left is Archbishop Jag, impatiently tapping on the ground with the tip of the shoe with quiet chober chabers. "So, Jenia Phrecia, a Witch from the village ruin of Smartpicides, what do you say in your defense? Recently, four children were killed, and the holy investigation revealed that their deaths involved wicked magic. Wicked magic, I said. Wicked. Magic. Yeah, Witch?" "I do not know anything about the deaths of children." "I shall purify you in flame, whore of Nightmare!", with anger yelled the general, pulling the sleeve of Dominus "Well. It is lie. And for all you sins I do sentence you to exile in Wraeclast!" -- Wrinkled hag was floated in the Wraeclast with heavy thoughts. There were two dozen exiles on the ship with her. She stayed on the sidelines, sitting, dressed in second-hand skirt, with wounded hands and feet and unwashed long black hair unwashed and listened. The voice of the black spirit was getting closer, he spoke with the most powerful of her subconscious, and it seemed, that the exile was a tool of the spirit, to bring the force to the witch. - The very sand shivers with malice. There is a power here that welcomes me. Last edited by Melissa_GGG on Aug 7, 2016, 7:24:14 PM Last bumped on Aug 8, 2016, 4:37:10 AM
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can they help you fix your sentence structure to?
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Please clearly mark the linked stories as not your own.
Loate has written a full set of character origin stories, and linking to just some of them to add yours in the line is not fair (no matter how good or bad yours is). In fact, seeing as you start off by stating this was done in communication with GGG (which I very much doubt) "as always"... you are clearly acting like you are in a position to continue the set of stories you linked, which you are not. Edit: Support fixed it. Last edited by MauranKilom on Aug 7, 2016, 7:27:26 PM
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" You can still read "to" from "too". Creator
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I read this (yes, the entire thing), and I have to say, 'A' for effort. I must confess, though, I'm curious - is this a legit effort to tell an origin story through Google translate from the original language (guessing Chinese or Japanese from the sentence structure), or a bot's attempt at transcribing the available public information from the PoE wiki and running it through babelfish?
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